Muse: Corvus
How many years has it been
Since you last touched my hand?
How long has it been
Since my eyes have met your smile?
Everything’s too late now,
I know that the best,
Yet I can’t keep myself from thinking,
Of things already lost.
I was the fool then,
And I reap what I sow,
Of things that could have been,
How life would’ve been now.
I don’t know why,
It’s been years since then,
Yet on late random nights,
I fail to stop my thoughts.
Thinking, and thinking
Late into the night,
Life could have been different,
If our cards had been played right.
I was the fool then,
I admit that as a fact,
It’s so true, that,
It’s a pity I did not act.
But it has been years,
Since I last saw your smile,
Like a paper stored in a file,
I cannot cease my thoughts,
And a realization came to me;
It was a feeling,
One, which I knew too well,
It was a feeling,
I had told myself;
Never again to feel its touch,
Never again to hear its grouch,
Yet fate would have had it,
I played right into Its hands.
No matter how many
Winters have passed me by,
No matter how many times
The flowers wither and die,
I will still harbour this feeling;
A feeling I cannot forget,
A feeling we fondly call,
Nothing but, Regret.
Do you feel it too?
Do you reminisces as I do?
Of those times, so many summers ago,
When we sat together and shared drinks and laughter,
Well, I remember…
And though everything is too late now,
Even if you feel no sorrow,
I hope that you do too…
-サヤカ-
0229 : 17th July 2008
-Oracl3-
P/s: Yes, I've decided to give that muse a name.. and I gave it the name Corvus, it is a small southern constellation of stars, south of Virgo, known also as the Crow or Raven..
Again it's a metaphor here... Well, I'm not sure if my metaphor is what normal people would, well, ermm associate with.. so if you can't get the metaphor, feel free to ask... ;p
By the way, did I mention? I've not written any such things for 5 years, I think? Yup, ever since high school, I've not written a poem, nor story [unless you count in 2007? When I wrote flow and solitude, for this blog].. Sad... I know.. but it's never too late to pick the habit up again :p
Labels: ✿私の気持✿, Literature
3 Comments:
Haha..I can feel that an ant can finally crawl from Johor Bahru to Bukit Hitam uses the time you describe in the poem! it has been a long time..
Good work.
Write more to impress!
I can feel that the ant can finally crawl from Batu Pahat to Bukit Kayu Hitam using the time you describe in the poem! Its has been a long time told by the poem.
Good work!
Write more to impress!
Hm....wanted 2 comment on this but a bit too busy lately =(
I do like the rhyming scheme, like some bits rhymed and some didn't, it's interesting in a mismatched way. I feel that the regret is very strong in this piece, which is good, because it's what you're trying to achieve.
The only fault which I can point out is that some of the lines sound a little bit cliche, but then again I may be the only person in the world who gets bugged by cliches.
But overall!!! Not too bad for trying your hand at writing again! You should continue writing. And maybe reading more poetry from real poets? Because you can learn how to improve from reading their stuff. =D
....and this is my review. It feels pretty long.
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