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The smooth surface, Almost mirror like, Watching it unknowingly, I entered its flow, Unconsciously submerged by it, Fighting to grasp the sky, Before being pulled down again, Following it’s flow, Unable to turn back, The road is set; I shall head to sea, Can you see the future? It’s unpredictable ✿Oracl3✿


Thursday, July 24, 2008

一リットル涙

Title: いちりっとるなみだ/One Litre of Tears [Same title as the TV Show]
This is for Ikeuchi Aya, for the encouragement her words have given to so many out there.
"What’s wrong with falling down, because as long as I stand up again, it’ll be just fine, if you look up at the sky after falling down, the clear blue sky stretches limitlessly. Smiling at me. –Ikeuchi Aya : 1 Litre of Tears-"
One litre of tears©
Muse: Aquarius

When the light of life, seems so bleak,
When the path I thread, seems to break.
My spirit it seems, I cannot keep,
The stream of life, which cannot weep.

When tears I hold, cannot fall,
I remember your courage,
Your strength, your all.
The tenacity, you never lost.

The words you said, the spirit you kept,
The love you had, though you wept.
Like river rapids, fast and strong,
It manages still, to be calmingly warm.

The limitless sky, smiles at you,
From where you lie, you seem to fly.
Falling down was fine with you,
As long, as you could stand again.

The past is one we shouldn’t dwell,
The present is which,
We must return to now,
Fighting on to live it well.

Were lessons you learnt;
The wisdom you gained,
You selflessly shared,
With the rest of the world.

Though you’ve left for the shadowed world,
Your image lives in the world of light.
The words you gave helped others live,
Knowing that life can still be bright.

-サヤカ-
Started: 2231: 18th July 2008 [Due to exams it was a stalled project...]
Finished: 2301: 23rd July 2008
"People shouldn’t dwell on the past. It’s enough to try your best in all that you’re doing now. Ikeuchi Aya : 1 Litre of Tears-"
Well, on the 18th of July 2008, I finally got my hands on the One litre of tears special episode [It's a Japanese TV Drama, really touching, and in which made me fan girl over Nishikido Ryo for a short while, due to his character as Asuo Haruto :p I want a guy like Asuo kun :p]

It's a very touching show, which I would recommend to anyone to watch, though the special was mostly on flashbacks, I still cried a lot for the show, so damn touching, and then.. Smart me, who was maybe in the exams procrastination mode, was struck by the muse. [The one which I had earlier said, I managed to shelve, as Time was of the essence to me then.]

This time I was hit by Aquarius [a large constellation of stars known as the water carrier], again, there is a metaphor here, but I think, this one is fairly easy to see. Water, water... Well, the poem has other metaphors as well.... slightly only though, in my opinion..

Ermm, this poem, sounds a tad weird to me, [because I had confined myself, as there were certain phrases which I wanted to make sure I used] but I'm okay with it, hence the reason I'm posting it haha.. Enjoy?

I'm not very good in this kind of things, but I like to write.. and actually I have like.. 2 stories? Hanging, since my high school days? I do get muses for them, but I never get down to writing them, and well, if I were to write, I would have to start from scratch again, because the time line was screwed... for one of them, and well for the other, I lack the general knowledge to write, and need to do research.. hence the reason it's both hanging..

But from time to time I get muses for poems, which I don't write.. and regretted later.. so I thought what the heck.. just write it.. :p

And... that's all from me.. if you want to understand the poem better [though I think it's pretty self explanatory, but I wrote it, so it's different, of course I understand it..] feel free to ask :)

It would be nice to know, that my literary works are at least appreciated by one person, and yes, the poem used the two quotes as references, [I would have used more quotes from the show, unfortunately my version of the show is in Malay subs... and well, my Japanese isn't that good to catch what they are saying that well..] in case you didn't realise.. And well, I might fine tune or tweak it later? but I think this should be the final version, if I do edit it, I will include a notice at the top of the post.

-Oracl3-

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3 Comments:

At 3:33 am GMT+9 , Anonymous Anonymous said...

Its such a smooth reading and meaningful poem! I think the poem describe precisely how you feel deep inside your heart.

P/s: I am sorry,I am not a literature geek, so, Can't comment too much about it. I only can tell you how I feel after reading it.. Terence will add it up for me!

 
At 1:23 pm GMT+9 , Blogger Mel said...

Hah! I like this rhyming scheme better! There's a visible pattern there.

I quite like these lines:

When the light of life, seems so bleak,
When the path I thread, seems to break.


It's the imagery I guess, which I am kinda a sucker for. But I think as I have told you ways in which to improve, This SHALL BE A SHORT REVIEW!

Am curious to see what else you come up with. ;)

 
At 3:33 am GMT+9 , Anonymous Anonymous said...

Hey! It's really good. And I'm being brutally honest here. It has quite a good flow. Seems like you were a little frustrated at the time it was written. Must be CLP. But yes, way to go! *Crowd chants 'We want more! We want more!'* Seriously, you got a good thing started. Share it with us!

I normally find poems a little boring and dull although they do rhyme. But hey, this piece of work should be cherished!

So, yea, that's what i think...

 

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